Falling To Pieces Intro

I decided to figure it out so other people could share in its awesomeness.  Im pretty
it is correct.  Sounds so to me.
You play it with your middle and ring fingers while holding the pick between your thumb
forefinger.       First Ending.
  x     x     x     x     x   x  |x     x   x x     x     x   x  |
Continues after the ad
  e e e e e e e e e e e e e e e e|e e e e e e e e e e e e e e e e|
e|5-5-5-3-3-3-1-1-1-0-0-0-1-1-0-0|-------------------------------| 
b|3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3|3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3| 
g|-------------------------------|5-5-5-5-5-2-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-5-5| 
d|-------------------------------|-------------------------------| 
a|-------------------------------|-------------------------------| 
E|-------------------------------|-------------------------------| 

Second Ending.                            Key + Hints
  x     x   x x     x     x   x  | x=accented note
  e e e e e e e e e e e e e e e e| e=eighth note
e|6-6-6-6-6-3-5-5-5-5-5-5-5-5-5-5| Keep your middle finger on the b-string 3--|         
b|3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3-3---------------------------------------------| on the e
g|----------------------------------------------------------------------------| for thos
d|----------------------------------------------------------------------------| fingers 
a|----------------------------------------------------------------------------| fretboar
e|----------------------------------------------------------------------------|         

e| 
b|-
g|e
d|s
a|d
e| 

e|    
b|stri
g| as 
d|prea
a| to 
e|    

e|                             
b|ng 3s use your middle finger 
g|well.  Use the rest of your  
d|d out across the rest of the 
a|hit the correct notes.       
e|                             

I think its right.  Do you think its right?  Please rate!